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S.Exercise #2 Feedback

Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Matt Varone, Aug 26, 2017.

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  1. #1 Matt Varone, Aug 26, 2017
    Hi all,

    Tried coming up with something new having in mind the feedback I got on the last exercise. This one has a clear theme, repetition and orchestral and harmony development.



    Things I noticed after going trough this:
    * While this was a speed exercise I would have benefited from outlining some story structure before going into the DAW. I felt lost on where to head to and just did what sounded good to move fast.
    * I need to practice transitions. Tried adding another theme for some sort of "love interest" but I found it hard to transition to it without sounding I was pulling it out of my ass. Any recommendations/tips to transition from one theme to another?

    Appreciate if anyone has any feedback. Thanks!
     
  2. #2 Gharun Lacy, Aug 27, 2017
    Hi Matt
    You've got your theme down for sure. By the end I could hum along on the first listen. That's good. The piece needs more harmonic development, though. You relied almost solely on changing the instruments that carried melody (and the addition of percussion at the end) for development and that left the piece a bit stagnant. You can try modulating to a new key, changing the tempo, or morphing the harmonic structure underneath. Changing one or two notes in the melody line won't fool the listener for long.

    Take a listen to Mike's "Tears of a Jedi".


    This is a great example of how he took a theme that we all know and completely re-contextualized it harmonically and with contrapuntal accents. Those are just a few examples of how we can keep a theme alive and fresh.

    Cheers.
     
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  3. #3 Matt Varone, Aug 28, 2017
    Hi Gharun,

    Thanks so much for the feedback! The harmony does change on the flute/harp bit but it's very close to the other, not a really significant change, stepping back I can see how it all passes as the same without noticeable development. I get so whirled up trying to make something that doesn't completely suck that I end up missing these key things!

    Mike example is amazing, far a way from my skills at this point, but definitely an inspiration to listen and learn from it.

    Going to keep your suggestions in mind for the next try!

    Cheers
    Matt
     
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