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Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Matthias Calis, Apr 1, 2023.

  1. #1 Matthias Calis, Apr 1, 2023
    I already cross posted this piece to a few forums, but not this one. I hesitated to post it here since it's unfinished (as happens to most of the music I work on), but ultimately not posting because something is unfinished has held me back way too often already.

    So here goes. An octatonic string piece which started as an exercise loosely inspired by the action harmony course over at filmmusicnotes.com, which I am very slowly working through.



    Any and all feedback is welcome.
     
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  2. #2 Duncan Formosa, Apr 1, 2023
    I'd say if I had to give you feedback on this piece it would be the same as the feedback I gave you in the composing challenge thread. You have a lot of great ideas and you ditch them super quickly to move onto the next idea when you haven't even used the last one to it's full potential. It's a little frustrating cause I like the ideas you have, I want MORE of them.

    Take the first 6 seconds of your piece for example, that alone you could expand on quite a bit I think. You clearly have plenty of ideas, now expand upon them. With the amount you have on this piece alone, if you took the time to expand on each idea before moving on you could have a piece between 4 maybe even 7 minutes! Just something to think about since you said you struggle to make your pieces any longer than 1 minute.
     
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  3. #3 Matthias Calis, Apr 2, 2023
    Thanks for the comment Duncan. I was already kind of expecting you to say this! You're right, but I find it a real challenge to fix. 4 to 7 minutes sounds wild to me haha
     
  4. #4 Duncan Formosa, Apr 2, 2023
    Sometimes it's as straight forward as repeating and modulating. Like I said, the first 6 seconds of the piece could be expanded on. Repeat that section again a second time to let people settle into the idea and let them know you meant it and then if you want to develop it further without putting in much of an effort, do what silvestri would do in the back to the future theme which is just repeat it again but in a different key!

    Just to give you an idea on how this could potentially be extended I've tried splicing bits of it together. It obviously won't be quite as effective without having some slight variations on the repeats whether it be in the melody or orchestration but it might give you some ideas on how to keep the ideas going.

     
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  5. #5 Matthias Calis, Apr 2, 2023
    Thanks for the feedback Duncan! I can see what you are going for but my ear is so used to hearing it how I wrote it that I think it's best if I step away from the piece for a while and then return to it fresh, when I'm less allergic to repetition.
     
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