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Hi Joe,

I feel like the melody could use some more consistency, particularly in its rhythm. Your melody follows a specific rhythm when it is introduced at 0:03, but you change that rhythm at 0:09, 0:15, and 0:21.

One topic that Mike brings up in the Unleashed series is that the average music listener wants to listen to music that makes them feel smart, and a big part of this is giving the listener the ability to predict what's next.

I don't feel that many listeners would expect the rhythm changes happening at the beginning of your piece, and they could cause some frustration for the listener.

I suggest giving your melody a more consistent rhythm and simplifying it. I think there was something good in there that you were trying to express, but the rhythm changes give it a muddled effect, even when you return to the entire sequence at 0:52.

As for the section from 1:17-2:05, it almost feels like it's from a different piece - I can't tie it back to the earlier section, and the chords feel a bit random.

Lastly, I'm not keen on the orchestration. It sounds like you've got a Rhodes doing a bossa nova rhythm, but the melody is coming from a very delicate piano where you can practically hear the player's fingers hitting the keys. I'll defer to others here for specifics on what would fit better, but I'm thinking a more loud/confident piano or maybe a flute could work.

I hope this was helpful!