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Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Michael Lückgen, Jul 3, 2021.

  1. #1 Michael Lückgen, Jul 3, 2021
    I made a little piece. Tried to tell a Story about a couple arguing wether one of them should take a job far away.
    I'm kinda okay with it, but am curious if the more tensful part and the transitions work.
    Let me know what you think!

     
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  2. #2 Bjarke Tan, Jul 9, 2021
    It's pretty good.
    Something I noticed is that you use the woodwinds a lot. It would probably be a goood idea to switch between the sections more for example every time you repeat the main idea you could switch it to an other instrument as well that way it brings a little more interest to the piece.

    It's similar to the idea that ones composition shouldn't be too diatonic as hearing the same intervals too many times will be boring. Hearing the same orchestration too much will have the same effect so it's a good idea to switch bettwen instruments/sections here and there.

    After the first listen I couldn't recall the main idea so it could likely be a bit stronger.

    You could also add some contrast to the flute by making counterpoint in the bassline a few times.
     
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  3. #3 Michael Lückgen, Jul 9, 2021
    Thank you for your feedback Bjarke!

    Noted. I will try to move the colors more next time and work on my melodies.
     
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