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Adventures In Alchemy — Fantasy Orchestra

Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Chris Schmidt, Jan 12, 2023.

  1. #1 Chris Schmidt, Jan 12, 2023
    This is an older piece, like 5 years old, that I dug out of storage. Let me know what you guys think of it.

     
  2. #2 Michael Lückgen, Jan 13, 2023
    Hey Chris,

    I think the intro from 0:00 to 0:17 is obsolete. I can't see the connection to the rest of the piece and after that you start another intro.
    In 0:25 you start with the melody, but I can't really hold onto it. It's not really memoreable for me and it kinda gets burried under the low strings.

    Since it is an older piece I don't know how much you have progressed, but I bet newer pieces will be much more focused.
    But putting that aside, my advice to work on after hearing this would be focusing on melody writing and putting that forward. The sounds are all really nice and it has a cool vibe, but for me it lacks a killer melody.
     
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