Can i have some feedback?

An awful lot of us having to take your word for it; we can predict almost zero of what you're going to do from moment to moment, which is fatiguing. If you're clever, you can teach the listener a basic vocabulary; a primer with which to translate what follows, but this isn't usually fun, either. Harmonic complexity is best and most satisfying when built on a relatable, "gettable" foundation. Without that, our work can be alienating and pretentious. Simplify.

 

Start with your own piece. Play just the top note of your motif. Maybe then the top note together with the single base notes below them and find out what the bounding conditions of the experience are. Strip it down.