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Looking for feedback

Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Bjarke Tan, Mar 5, 2021.

  1. #1 Bjarke Tan, Mar 5, 2021
    Hey I was wondering if I could get some feedback before I am making this into an orchestration.
    https://voca.ro/14ojXoAsNz4V
    Thanks in advance.
     

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  2. #2 Mark Wayne, Mar 14, 2021
    Hi Bjarke,

    I think that the recurring 1/32 notes on the left hand make it difficult to fully enjoy this piece.
    When I listen to the first few bars, it feels like the left hand is fighting with the melody for attention.
    It might be better to simplify the left hand into just 1/8 or 1/16th notes, and maybe keep the 1/32 notes specifically for moments where you want to embellish.
    The cluster of 1/32 notes is unusual and can be effective, but saving it for a special moment will give it more of an effect than having it repeat throughout the piece.

    The part that begins at 1:22 and ends at around 2:00, in my view, is much stronger than the rest of the piece and much easier to follow. The chord change at 1:30 was especially nice to hear.

    Just my two cents!
     
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