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El Tango del Papi Bod (The Tango of the Dad Bod)

Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Doug Gibson, Dec 24, 2019.

  1. #1 Doug Gibson, Dec 24, 2019
    Last edited: Dec 28, 2019
    Hello Everyone.

    Well, as most of you know 2019 has been a real battle for me with depression and taking medications to treat it.
    Thus, it has been too emotionally intense for me to write anything.

    Thanks to @Aaron Olson for the motivation to begin to tinker again and start the healing process to return to my write.

    @Mike Verta gave me the spark of inspiration to overcome and is in fact the inspiration of the song. I will never be able to hear this song without picturing Mike Verta's face in my mind.

    Which is good, as for a while I thought he was going thru a Glenn Beck transvestite phase


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    and soon I would only think of him while eating fried chicken.

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    (Shit .... now I am hungry for some KFC)


    Somehow reading this comment

    it clicked for me that Mike and I belong to the same tribe. Let us celebrate this wonderful natural phenomenon that is now scientifically proven: The Dadbod. Yes, chicks dig us.

    https://www.nytimes.com/2015/05/21/upshot/the-dad-bod-quantified.html
    https://well.blogs.nytimes.com/2015/06/08/show-us-your-dad-bod/

    Somewhere in the back of my mind, for the last two years I thought Dad bod would be a great name for a band.
    I have also wanted to write a samba called "Butt-cheek Bongo" which would be inspired by .... well, I am sure you can figure it out.

    So with that, I say let's show it --- Loud and Proud.

    Be warned everyone ---- the song gets a little sexy. I only use Sibelius and Noteperformer as I don't want to knock your pants right off.

    *** I am struggling with the right text for the chorus. (after harp gliss) Please do let me know if you have a better idea. @Craig Dukerschein

    Dance, dad bod Dance

    Put us in a trance
    Pant size for-ty se-ven
    I'll send you to Hea-ven
    All come a-long
    and sing this song

    Dance, dad bod Dance

    Grab a glass of milk......this one gets hot. It's not done yet, but let me know if you find your self getting whisked away.
    Would help me to finish ..... this .....deep, and very serious piece of music.

    LATEST VERSION




    @Aaron Venture: What say ye? Still some sexy spanish music in our repetoire...yes ?

    One of my all time favorite songs:


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    @Mike Verta: You know I am crazy, and have a sweet tooth for bad jokes. (like above) Just jivin.
    Thanks for creating a cool space to hang, and wishing you and your family a very happy Christmas/new years.
     
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  2. #2 Paul T McGraw, Dec 24, 2019
    @Doug Gibson you can do more with NotePerformer than most of us mere mortals can do with samples. But how about the rest of the piece?

    Despite your teasing, this is a marvelous start of a very emotional tango.
     
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  3. #3 Alexander Schiborr, Dec 24, 2019
    Hey Doug! And of course everyone!

    Merry Christmas to you and everyone.

    @Doug: Hang in. I hope, no..I am pretty sure better times are coming. Don't give up, mate (I know you don´t) If there is something I can do let me know.

    PS: I will check out your piece very soon.
     
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  4. #4 Aaron Olson, Dec 24, 2019
    Fuck yeah Doug! This is Dad-bod-acious.

    Ah, your sexy fold
    Gives me more to hold
    Pant size forty-seven
    Takin' me to heaven
    Do you wanna know what makes me hot?
    del Papi Bod

    I don't have any feedback for you right now other than congrats again on getting back in the saddle. I don't know if life gets any better, but with a lot of work and a little luck, we ourselves just might.
     
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  5. #5 Aaron Venture, Dec 25, 2019
    You know, I've just listened to the new Star Wars OST along with the old one. Not gonna lie, this piece of yours is giving me such nice "victory celebration" vibes. What do you call a Spanish Jedi apprentice?

    Merry Christmas, Doug. Merry Christmas, everyone!
     
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  6. #6 Alexander Schiborr, Dec 25, 2019
    Also, maybe for some people that might be a cheesy movie, but man..whenever I am not in a good mood, go and watch "A Christmas Story". I love that movie..(Actually on TBS with 24 hour repeat).


    Last but not least: I listened to your piece Doug! Nice one, really enjoyed it. Any chance you might extend it to a Radio length type of Song?
     
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  7. #7 Doug Gibson, Dec 25, 2019
    Yes, that is the plan. I can only work on it at night as the kids are home from school this weel.

    I think I can get to about the 4 minute mark. I need a solo or something before the return to the chorus. It's too bare right now, .....
    you'll know where I am talking about. (from 2;00 to 2:15)


    This is as much as I have at the moment

     
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  8. #8 Doug Gibson, Dec 26, 2019
    OK. Latest version below

    @Aaron Venture I took your ideas from our last collaboration. How do I sound? Can you tell it's a white dude?
    I'll work on it.

    Getting closer.

    Any and all criticism are welcome.

    It's such a deep piece, but I am having fun.

     
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  9. #9 Aaron Venture, Dec 26, 2019
    Is that you on the mic? Hahahah

    If you need a solo, a hand clapping and foot stomping solo could do well. With some crazy rhythms. Steal from that Whiplash finale, just make it Spanish.
     
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  10. #10 Doug Gibson, Dec 26, 2019
    100000% Yes it is!
     
  11. #11 Aaron Venture, Dec 26, 2019
    Coulda fooled me.
     
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  12. #12 Paul T McGraw, Dec 27, 2019
    @Doug Gibson I am loving it. You are definitely getting there. I can't remember who said it first, but I have come to live by the motto, "if it's worth doing once, it's worth doing twice." The vocals are great. I would put in one of those "Haha . . . " also just as we break into the full tango at about 50 seconds or so. Corny, yes, but these things become corny for a reason, right? Another idea, just an opinion, we have had very little in the upper registers. Perhaps we could have a flute, just before the cello returns. Also as a supporting instrument in part of the main section. Just to extend the pitch register.

    These are just a few production ideas. The actual piece is fantastic! I can see this being a wonderful track for those production library thingies. I mean that as a compliment. Well done Doug.
     
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  13. #13 Craig Dukerschein, Dec 27, 2019
    @Doug Gibson My compadres and I appreciate how your tango both celebrates the music of our people (even though we are from Iowa), and our body type. We have agreed that from now on you don’t need a stinking badge.

    I hope you like this recent photo. My dog was so taken by your tango he chewed my sombrero!

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  14. #14 Mauro Pantin, Dec 27, 2019
    I'm loving the development of this. If you want to go more into tango territory you could have a Bandoneon in there or maybe a section with staccato stabs in the style of Juan D’Arienzo. Here he is directing his orchestra:



    I would also like to suggest tap tempo into the DAW or Sibelius whilst holding this critical old school tango conductor position.

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  15. #15 Doug Gibson, Dec 28, 2019

    Hey Mauro!

    Lot's of good ideas. Wow.....that video is something else. Unreal.

    Listening to that piece just shows going 5-3-2-1 never goes out of style. It's all over my piece too.



    I think I now have the whole form down.
    I am not sure if the ending should have a clear cut ending, or just repeating the chorus and doing the old fade out.

    Nearly 98% of having the whole form mapped out, and once I feel ok with that I will "Dummy Check" things and also make revisions.
    I like your suggestions, and Paul's too. I have an aversion to high woodwinds, and also anything accordion.
    But both of you make excellent points, and I do need to experiment some more and see about including your suggestions.

    Thank you !!

    Mauro: Did you receive my email, and my many thanks?
     
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  16. #16 Mauro Pantin, Dec 28, 2019
    There's something awesome about that sequence. It's all over Flamenco music as well. There's got to be a common "ancestor genre" or influence or something like that. I never studied a lot of music history but I bet there's a fascinating explanation to it. I imagine the path that pattern has traveled to be around in so many different types of music, some of them quite old in fact, it has to be crazy.

    Yes! Thank you for your kind e-mail! I wasn't sure if getting back to you through email or not since I thought we were following up here and didn't want to intrude in your work-related inbox any further than I already had. :)
     
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  17. #17 Craig Dukerschein, Dec 29, 2019
    Last edited: Dec 29, 2019
    @Doug Gibson,
    Sorry, I missed this request.

    This is a first pass at lyrics starting a (v4) 1:42. Is that the spot you wanted to start from? I didn't hear any harp glissandos, only piano. Might be nice symmetry to have a chorus with a female perspective (the opposite of the dad's delusion).

    Sen-io-ritis think that
    My body’s mag-ni-fic.

    Watch me dance the tan-go
    Then they gro-vel at ma feet.

    Amor is on their minds,
    I ‘m not in my prime,
    But I want to love them, be-cause I am a slime.
    Tango DB v4 lyric.jpg
     
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  18. #18 Doug Gibson, Dec 30, 2019
    I love that you included a written out notation. Can't you picture that in a case at the Smithsonian someday ?

    I’ll eventually get a singer on this. Ask a friend for a favor or something

    Basically it begins sad:

    The main characters pectoral muscles have turned into “Man Boobs"

    The rest of the lyrics are basically how his point of view transforms.
    It can be summed up with

    “I was born with a sack, and a crack.
    Hey, look everyone; now I got a rack"

    (This is actually pretty auto-biographical. My son, who is 2, over the last year would come up to me and try and grab my nipples while saying "Ba-ba".
    His term for milk. He likes my jugs. I would push him aside and give the only appropriate reply: "Fuck-off little man.")



    The chorus is

    Dance Dad bod dance
    You’ll put us in a trance
    Pant size forty-Seven
    Send us up to Heaven
    So come along
    and sing this song.
    Dance dad bod Dance.
     
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  19. #19 Alex O'Hagan, Dec 30, 2019
    this is awesome Doug lol. good job on getting back in the ring

    the voices at the end kill me :D
     
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  20. #20 Doug Gibson, Dec 30, 2019
    Thanks, man!

    I appreciate it.

    Wishing you all the best
     
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