5th Avenue

Ha ! First, let me just say I am biased as I despise walking down 5th ave in December. Hate it, hate it, hate it.
In fact.... I pretty much avoid the east side.

Anyhow.... I like your piece. I don't really have much to comment on unless you are looking for something specific ?
I would just passively say: Why not make a group of these small pieces ? Do like 5 or 6. Experiment with different timbres.
This was about enough string pizz. I could take. Just have fun with them.

Thanks for sharing it !

 

Have you been taking Alex Ball's writing Spiffing Harmonies class perchance?

I dig the vibe quite a bit but I do think it starts and ends a bit abruptly and I have some mixed feelings about the chime at the end. I don't think you need it? Now, I am not a string player but I think that those pizzes are on the fast side. Playable, for sure, but not necessarily peanuts. Just something to be aware of, I think.

I listened to it a few more times and I think you can go a bit further with it. The ending sounds to me as though you got a little tired of your own ideas, but maybe I'm just projecting one of my own problems (I'm very practiced at writing 20 second pieces haha). In any case I think it'd be worth it to see if you could extend the jingle a little more, or otherwise make the end a little more satisfactory. It kinda feels like we stopped in the middle of it at the moment.

Other than that, I don't have many comments, it's a perfectly fine jingle to my ears and certainly evokes the mood of some jolly Holiday

Also @Doug Gibson I am equal parts intrigued and mystified by the video you posted lol. Probably a generation gap (or chasm) but that video went way over my head. Did you post it for the jingle or...?

 

At least equally intrigued. I'll take that.

Wait ...... who is older here ? Don't make me feel like an old man

(I'm just kidding.... I don't care)

There it goes !

Sure, I do like the jingle.

But basically it's satire. These genre pieces are "send-ups" IMO. If not of the genre itself, then of the shopping experience.
See the irony of it is the video is called "Theme of Luxury" and then it's basically a bunch of cheap crap.
The music is trying to be all exciting while we see images of "gum", "frying pans", "Baked Beans" (I'll skip over the Man/Woman editing)

It's just my dark humor. See I posted that 5th ave is an extremely aggravating place for me, and hearing the happy care-free song sparked that connection.

 

Hey Paul

I like the piece as well. Pizz brings a specific vibe and you nailed it. This is just taste (because your execution here is excellent), but for me when ever there is an established homogeneous vibe like all pizz, I really enjoy a fairly dramatic shift in timbre. You have a great opportunity development there that I would like to hear. Think sodrino string section into trombone choir type changes. If not that, go all out for the 50's sound and bring in some arco strings for melody.

Again, all taste there. Great work!

As for @Doug Gibson's video.....I spent two years on mefloquine to avoid catching malaria while living in Nigeria. Your vid is exactly like the psychedelic dreams I used to have on it.

 

Very cool piece, but the performance feels a bit quantized. I think it could breathe a bit more.

That Alex Ball video is great!