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"We wish you a Merry Christmas" Reharm.

Discussion in 'Critique & Feedback' started by Claude Ruelle, Dec 3, 2017.

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  1. #1 Claude Ruelle, Dec 3, 2017
    Last edited: Dec 3, 2017
    Hey guys!

    So I've been following Mike's advice and been playing around with Christmas carols on the piano. I came up with this version of "We wish you a Merry Christmas" using simple "pop" harmony:

    https://www.dropbox.com/s/59sxq9m7wvheiwd/We wish you a merry christmas reharm.mp3?dl=0

    Let me know what you think. Also, I think it would be great if you guys could do your own version and share it here. We could turn this into a reharmonization thread, a little bit like what @Alexander Schiborr did with the orchestration thread. What do you think?
     
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  2. #2 Alexander Schiborr, Dec 3, 2017
    Sounds like a cool idea! I would join that.
     
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  3. #3 Sylvain Provenzano, Dec 3, 2017
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  4. #4 Noam Levy, Dec 4, 2017
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  5. #5 Claude Ruelle, Dec 4, 2017
    @Sylvain Provenzano Nice one! Just be careful at 00:18 when you go to the V - I think it feels a bit awkward because most of us are subconsciously waiting for a resolution here. Also, that makes the melody note (G) a 4th and as you know this is a dissonance. You get around it by playing a sus4 but it still feels a bit unnatural.
     
  6. #6 Sylvain Provenzano, Dec 4, 2017
    @Claude Ruelle Thank for your advice. Wouldn't sound less awkward if I had played the sus4 and resolution twice longer ? I ask because that's what I did before recording and it never bothered me.
     
  7. #7 Claude Ruelle, Dec 4, 2017
    Well, I don't know. What's happening here is that you're turning your melody into a 4th to 3rd resolution - This should happen in the harmony but not in the melody. Plus it creates parallel octaves. My personal opinion is that you shouldn't go to the V and resolve it instead.
     
  8. #8 Sean Barrett, Dec 4, 2017
    This looks fun, I will jump in on this later.
     
  9. #9 Sean Barrett, Dec 4, 2017
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  11. #11 Francesco Bortolussi, Dec 5, 2017
    A late night attempt at the piano. Done it veeery fast (about 15 minutes?), almost improvised.

    I wish I knew how to play jazz.



    [​IMG]
     
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  12. #12 Doug Gibson, Dec 5, 2017
    You know what would make it much better ? At measure 9 add in a repeat sign to measure 2. Just repeat the whole section. No change in dynamics, or articulations. :) Just kidding you


    In all seriousness I would kindly offer, that to my ears measure 16 is off. Just make the whole of 16 a dominant. Slow it down so it feels like an ending.
    The A# with B on top sounds off to me.

    I would personally just simplify it like below. I like what you did BTW.

    Screen Shot 2017-12-04 at 10.31.21 PM.png
     
  13. #13 Kyle Judkins, Dec 5, 2017
  14. #14 Francesco Bortolussi, Dec 5, 2017
    Ha! :D :D
    Yeah it definitely makes more sense! Thanks!

    That's simply glorious!

    This sounds great!

    Oh man, this thread is so much fun
     
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  15. #15 Sean Barrett, Dec 5, 2017
    Another option for m16 if you want to keep the A# (Bb) in the bass is to make it a dominant chord. Bb Ab D E from bottom to top. I'd also change the chord at m12 because the Fmaj7 to D doesn't feel smooth and also holding the D chord for two measures disrupts the flow of the harmony changing every measure. You could either make m12 a Dsus that resolves to D in m13, or make m12 an A chord (which is in the original).
     
  16. #16 Francesco Bortolussi, Dec 5, 2017
    Thanks a lot! I really wanted to find a way to keep the Bb, but I couldn't really figure it out. I could almost "hear it", but not quite, so thank you for that :)
    Also, great advice about measure 12, definitely an improvement!
     
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  17. #17 Mattia Chiappa, Dec 8, 2017
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  18. #18 Sylvain Provenzano, Dec 8, 2017
    I'm afraid your link won't work. You have to click on 'Share' to obtain the link.
     
  19. #19 Mattia Chiappa, Dec 8, 2017
    ops I'll fix that, sorry
     
  20. #20 Patrick McClanahan, Dec 9, 2017
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